Hey guys, here’s my first-ever Base Class for Dungeon World.
Can’t wait to have your feedbacks and even if I’m a newbie, don’t pull your punches!
A few notes on the character concept: it’s based on a setting I’m developing for something else (a comic book…) that I’ve been dying to play in/test for some time -and DW is perfect for it!
I adjusted the original concept for the D&D-inspired fantasy races (dwarves & humans) but know that the Soldier of Law is basically a “desert stormtrooper”, a mix between a Spartan warrior and a primitive Templar-like warrior-with-faith.
The Confederate Cities they usually come from are located in a rocky desert basin that generates a tough breed of warriors, DWARF warriors in this version. The humans are basically mercenaries that joined the Army of Law.
And yes, they worship the Law as a deity, and are ready to go at length to enforce it. If they ever leave the Army, some find work as “respected” Headsmen in the many courts of the violent province.
That’s it!
Look forward to hear from you!
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Other than a few formatting and grammatical issues (no real reason why there has to be a third page, missing word in Improvised Weaponry, etc), I see two problems with this.
1. The Chaotic alignment’s description is a little vague. I don’t really understand what I’m supposed to do other than a nebulous “do something harsher than what the Laws say. Speaking of which, I’ve got no real idea of what these laws are, which is something you could easily tie into a starting move (see: Cleric and Barbarian).
2. Justice is Served could use a bit of a rewrite. As is, there’s no real reason not to take the first option at any point. +1 forward AND ignore armor might be a little much, too, but I think that’s just me. You should probably be looking at effects similar to The Mage’s Cast a Spell move for the 7-9 options instead.
Thanks Ryan Peel .
Cool suggestions & notes. I will take a look at it like you say.
And yeah, I saw the bad formatting right after I posted it. Will re-post it after I write a new draft. (sorry about that)
Also please consider this just a “discussion draft”, any typo or other error will be dealt with asap. 😛 I was in an enthusiastic rush…
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