10 thoughts on “The result of my poll… Say hello to The Mute!”

  1. I am a bit uncomfortable with this sentence:

    Right until the moment it stood above their bedrolls, axe raised to claim them that is.

    And I would definitely add a

    Seek revenge for its dismemberment action to it.

    Good work anyway!

  2. I don’t quite understand “to claim them that is“. If I understand it right, I woud’ve written

    to claim them, I mean which would be more in the tone of someone speaking. Otherwise, I don’t understand your sentence.

    Right until the moment it stood above their bedrolls. OK

    Right until the moment it stood above their bedrolls, axe raised. OK

    Right until the moment it stood above their bedrolls, axe raised to claim them. I wouldn’t phrase it that way but it feels OK

    Right until the moment it stood above their bedrolls, axe raised to claim them that is. Duh!??!

    Don’t know if I make my point…

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