This is the beginning of an idea, just wanted to sound it out.
When you make a sacrifice, answer the following three questions about what you are sacrificing to the fates:
Is it something valuable to you or your community?
Is it something living, or very recently deceased?
Is it NOT something that would be harmful if alive and unchecked?
For each answer of “yes”, hold 1 Fate.
The third clause is designed to make sure the sacrifice has some value. Junk isn’t a good sacrifice. A dead monster could be a sacrifice, but probably only worth 1 Fate. I’m not satisfied with it yet though. How would you write this?
What about “Is it something that would have not caused harm if left alone?” for the last one?
Did/Would the sacrifice threaten you or your cause?
This may require that you change the other two. I don’t think this can be worded “negatively “
About the third clause: is it needed?
I understand its meaning is to make a dead monster worth only 1 Fate, but this comes already by answering NO to the 1st and YES to the 2nd
Can you make an example of what is worth 2 Fate and what is 3 Fate?
(I think the logic behind the move is a bit flawed: clause 3 is somehow redundant with the others)
I’m without context, is this a reference to some other move?
For instance, what is a Fate? Is it better or worse to have 1 or more Fate? Is this a hold-type currency to be spent on something? Or a new meter acting as the stat for some custom move?
I would also want to know what is meant by “sacrifice” – if it isn’t something valuable, you might not be making a sacrifice, for instance. When i go to the bathroom or throw the trash out, i don’t consider that a sacrifice…. If you aren’t making a sacrifice, the move isn’t triggered. So instead of asking “if it had value” maybe ask what value/meaning it had.
So yeah… without context, my best feedback is that the wording is too convoluted. I would simplify it as follows:
When you make a sacrifice, answer the following three questions:
What did this sacrifice mean to you?
Did this sacrifice require death?
Was the sacrifice an innocent?
For each answer of “yes”, hold 1 Fate.
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Andrew Fish I really like your variant!
I would further tune it as follows – to keep it to the ‘yes’ count and give space for some world-building to the player:
When you make a worthy sacrifice, answer the following three questions:
Was this sacrifice meaningful to you or the beneficiary of the sacrifice?
Did this sacrifice require death or destruction?
Was the sacrifice an innocent or something irreplaceable?
For each answer of “yes”, explain to the table why yes, and hold 1 Fate.
Thanks for the help! Andrew Fish Fate is going to be a type of hold that is spent on another move. “When you pray for a miracle, spend at least 1 Fate and roll+Fate spent.”