# Matt Horam brings up the point that the DW Encumbrance move has some awkward wording, and has requested the wording…

Matt Horam brings up the point that the DW Encumbrance move has some awkward wording, and has requested the wording…

Matt Horam brings up the point that the DW Encumbrance move has some awkward wording, and has requested the wording be changed in the moves summary in Perilous Wilds Survival Kit.

Here’s what it says now:

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Encumbrance

When you make a move while carrying weight, you may be encumbered. If your weight carried is…

… equal to or less than your load, you suffer no penalty.

… less than or equal to your load+2, you take -1 ongoing until you lighten your burden.

… greater than your load+2, drop at least 1 weight and roll at -1, or automatically fail.

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Matt has requested that the second option—”… less than or equal to your load+2, you take -1 ongoing until you lighten your burden”—be changed to something like, “… exceeds your load by 1 or 2, you take -1 ongoing until you lighten your burden.”

Reading the original move, though, it seems clear that all three options are worded for consistency (“equal to or less than,” “less than or equal to,” “greater than”). So what about:

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Encumbrance

When you make a move while carrying weight, you may be encumbered. If your weight carried…

… does not exceed your load, you suffer no penalty.

… exceeds your load by 1 or 2, you take -1 ongoing until you lighten your burden.

… exceeds your load by 3 or more, drop at least 1 weight and roll at -1, or automatically fail.

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Better? Worse?

## 5 thoughts on “Matt Horam brings up the point that the DW Encumbrance move has some awkward wording, and has requested the wording…”

1. BETTER.

I’m actually so surprised I never saw the problem with the original text in the core book until today.

… exceeds your load by no more than 2

… exceeds your load by 1 or 2

Semantics I know, but I just do not like listing multiple values.

3. It’s better.

I realized the clunkiness of the move while making some (french) move sheets. I decided to completely remove the Encumbrance move from the advanced move sheet (and put the Order Hireling one in its place). A simple reminder in the equipment section suffices, in my opinion :

– If weight exceeds your load by 1 or 2, you take -1 ongoing until you lighten your burden.

– If weight exceeds your load by 3 or more, drop at least 1 weight and roll at -1, or automatically fail.

4. Okay, changed and uploaded the revised document.